*No Name at the Moment*
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*No Name at the Moment*
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Her back stiffened. She
heard his voice
again, and an icy chill
crept down her spine.
Making the hair on the
back of her neck
stand on end. "He's not
here." she tried to
tell herself. "He's not
here. He's DEAD!"
"Are you sure?" his voice
again. Right. Next. To.
Her. Ear. She whipped around,
bringing her hand with her.
She slapped nothing.
Nothing but crisp air.
Her breath came out in a sigh
of relief It came out just before
she collapsed to her knees.
Collapsed to her knees, and
started to sob.
"Chapter" 1::
Maddie stared out her
bedroom window.
The sky was dark and
gloomy, just as
she felt herself. She looked
down and another
tear landed in the already
formed pool of tears
on the glass of his picture.
THEIR picture. It had
happened only two days
before. A big car crash.
A huge semi against a
little mustang. Not a
very fair match. It wouldn't
have hurt Maddie so
much if the person in the
mustang had been
anybody else. No, it had
to have been him.
Him of all people, of
all days. They chose
this one. They chose HIM.
Tears streamed
down her face again
as she stared at
his picture again. She
couldn't believe he
was gone. Her head fell
to her pillow. She stuck
his picture under her bed.
Staring at the ceiling
she fell asleep. That was
the first time it happened
Last edited by L♥VE on Wed Nov 11, 2009 5:21 pm; edited 1 time in total
L♥VE- Inspired Novice
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Re: *No Name at the Moment*
Your style of writing reminds me of the books Hopkins wrote, any connections?
I only spotted a few typos, but it seems really good. I would love to continue reading. ^^
I only spotted a few typos, but it seems really good. I would love to continue reading. ^^
Re: *No Name at the Moment*
Who's Hopkins? I swear, I honestly don't know.
Yeah, I forgot to spell check. Whoops. I'm glad you think it's good. ^^
Yeah, I forgot to spell check. Whoops. I'm glad you think it's good. ^^
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xD Ah, they are an author I've recently gotten into. Their books are like poems, that is different on eachpage,written with different length and sometimes all over the page but tells a story all together.
And I see you have taken in a pet as well.
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Huh, yup, never heard of them. ^^ Sorry.
Yeah, it was so cute, I wanted it. =]
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love the story, keep ritin
tried to get one, wont work on opera browser
tried to get one, wont work on opera browser
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wow thats good! post more! :D
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Very good. Love it (:
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